Can anyone spot the minor quirk in it?
The most important to me was getting rid of the Purple Cowboy and replacing him with a soldier - as that who the main character of the story is. Even the cell phone fits in a bit as he bought one at the Base Exchange.
The Saguaro signifies the Sonora Desert and Brother Coyote is singing to his family.
Here's a short blurb of the story:
Staff Sergeant RAY DANIELS, a modern Cherokee warrior, uses a traditional dream snare to blot out the memories of his brothers-in-arms spilling their blood in a Taliban ambush he believed he should have stopped. A Papago Indian Elder helps Ray call upon his spirit helpers to heal his body, but they are unable to mend his bruised soul. A Cherokee healer assists the Elder and several Papago folk healers to lead Ray through an extremely dangerous rite using Sacred Datura in which Elder Brother, I´itoi an ancient Papago spirit, shows him his past -- and restores his future.
An editor has been assigned I think I will be able to work with - he's teaching US Marines stationed in Okinawa and should understand military personnel. Looks like things are moving along.
